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Poem, comments and criticism please!?
after she gave birth
my mother took me to be born
to a hospital of gospels and frankincense
where bent statuettes crowded solemn walls
and crimson candles awaited flame
their twisted, black wicks begging to be burned
our doctor wore traditional white
and while windows sighed sapphire light
that leaked through their stained flesh
he looked like I imagine a ghost would
translucent in the purifying sun
beside a baptismal fountain.
my parents spoke only "lawrence" to him
smiling back above his folded palms
he cupped them in water and blessed my head
etching a cross for my mind to carry
how it grew with the child
like an invisible limb
It might’ve been years since then,
But I had just left the womb-
Once again.
The spiritual man is reborn many times, in baptism into the spiritual life, and the remembrance of that sacred rite, and contemplation on its significance, is itself an opportunity for rebirth. It is never ending. This is a very thoughtful free verse selection and though I know you are somewhat averse to punctuating (so was john Clare!), you will one day meet copy editors who have a different 'philosophy.' The layering of imagery - sanctuary on delivery room - was handled artfully. A very fine write...
May we beg the favor of response on our open poem?
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