Seal Carving Good

This poem is about Hamlet's Ophelia who went crazy and drowned herself because Hamlet didn't love her. This poem is her thoughts while drowning:

A tide of frigid water
submerges whats left of me.
I seal my eyes shut but
images of you are all I see.

My soul was tortured
by the agony of this love unshared.
I gave my life for you
but you simply never cared.

Your name is carved
into my heart forevermore
The flame of my worship to you
boils the blood of my core

Thoughts of you plague my mind
as I have a bitter ephiphany
How can I live with myself
If the love of my life can't love me?

As I choke out my last breath,
I let out a scream, long overdue
Oh Hamlet! I am burdened with you love
And for that, I'll never forgive you...

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